An Extremely Sensitive, Personal Poem

Mark DenHoed writes,

I have decided to open up my heart and share the outpourings of my delicate soul.

Xanthus

The blossom of hope,
That glimmer of youth,
Tumble down the slope
Oh, dear, forsooth!

The blue of the sky,
The wash of the sea,
The fear to soon die,
A shattering plea

The warmth of your gaze,
the sound of kind words,
Now lost in the haze,
The doomed gallows birds

The summit of Joy,
May life never cease,
Sharp rocks ahoy!
May we rest in peace…

fin

There.  Wasn’t that very personal and sad ?   And how about that little French word?  That thing exudes class.  This poem reflected on the nature of the world, it contemplated how our lot in life involves both good and bad!  It showcased a bleak look at reality.

Doesn’t that make it deep?  Doesn’t that make it a good poem?

Posted at 2:48 pm EST on the 29th of September 2009 by M. C. DenHoed.

Under Literary and Cinematic Criticism, Poetry, Satire as ,

There are 11 replies.
 
  1. H. G. Roorda says on September 29th, 2009 at 3:11 pm

    Actually, I really like the last verse. Sharp rocks, ahoy, indeed!

  2. R. A. Byrd. says on September 30th, 2009 at 7:36 am

    Very classy….were you running low on things to post?

  3. R. A. Byrd. says on September 30th, 2009 at 7:37 am

    Oh, and we don’t like the line about the gallows birds. That’s too personal.

  4. John R. Ahern says on September 30th, 2009 at 9:33 am

    “In many ways, the work of a critic is easy. We risk very little yet enjoy a position over those who offer up their work and their selves to our judgment. We thrive on negative criticism, which is fun to write and to read. But the bitter truth we critics must face, is that in the grand scheme of things, the average piece of junk is more meaningful than our criticism designating it so.”

    Ahem.

  5. J. C. Dean says on September 30th, 2009 at 10:10 am

    It’s very good! I like how the first two lines of every stanza is bright and joyful and the next two are dark and dismal.

    I really like that quote, John. (I’m still trying to figure out if the last word in your comment is “A-h-e-m” or “A-h-e-r-n”.)

  6. R. A. Byrd says on October 1st, 2009 at 7:34 am

    John, it’s really silly to sign a post “Ahern” when we know that it’s you posting anyway. =P

  7. Hastus says on October 1st, 2009 at 12:42 pm

    Where does Xanthus come into it?

  8. G. F. Bertilson says on October 6th, 2009 at 1:48 pm

    Pithy, soundbitey.

  9. Peter E. Goodwynd says on October 12th, 2009 at 8:53 pm

    R.A. Byrdy, dear,

    John DIDN’T sign his name Ahern. He said AHEM. :P

    Ahem.

  10. Lillian Taylor says on October 26th, 2009 at 10:47 am

    Perfectly sickening. It should be in LLR. XD

  11. Carson Spratt says on November 1st, 2009 at 7:31 pm

    John Ahern, you should probably attribute that quote to Ratatouille. The quotation marks are a hint, I guess.