Two Haikus

John Ahern writes,

I’m trying my hand at haikus. Forgive me if the allusions are esoteric. Here are two. (The first is a combination of Eastern and Western poetry, i.e. the Odyssey.)

Mnesterophonia

Dedicated to Rachel Ahern

log piles getting low
random scar ekphrasis
opportune moment


Dedicated to Christopher Nicholas Evans Embrey.

“Well, to be honest, right now I’m not capable of understanding anything. It sounds like we have a poet who sleeps in too much, to me, though.”

beautiful sunrise
the poet doesn’t know though
a late last night.

Posted at 8:37 pm EST on the 15th of October 2007 by John R. Ahern.

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There are 5 replies.
 
  1. Becca says on October 16th, 2007 at 1:22 pm

    I like them, you’ve got a lot of talent there. Keep up the good work! :-)

  2. Philip Hilton says on October 18th, 2007 at 10:58 am

    Very esoteric. Ecphrasis, hm? XD

    What were you intending to convey in the first poem?

  3. Han says on October 18th, 2007 at 10:32 pm

    I am highly amused.

  4. Rachel says on October 29th, 2007 at 6:10 pm

    John– I am honored that you have dedicated such a beautiful poem to me. Both haikus are very clever and well-crafted. For the sake of precision (whence beauty, often)–for which I know that you are concerned, as a philologist and a philosopher–I must point out that there is a flaw in each poem, according to the rigid rules of haiku meter which state a 5-7-5 syllable pattern. In the first, there are only 6 syllables in the second line; in the second, there are only 4 in the third line. I hope that finding an additional syllable for each of these will not upset the delicate poetic balance that you have achieved. If it does, you could simply leave them as they are but without the haiku label…

  5. Anonymous says on October 30th, 2007 at 4:23 am

    John, you’re a blockhead.